黃新雅( 961002010, Sophia Huang)
Professor Liang
English Composition 2A
Jan. 8, 2009
Could Gay be Gay?
Homosexuality is a description of those people who tend to love the same gender as they are. Those people are so-called gays or lesbians. Nowadays, due to the fact that homosexuality was once said to be shameful and abnormal, it has become a controversial issue that provokes the public to think whether such sexual orientation is acceptable or not. “ In the closet” is a form to describe such kind of situation that they are in. Since the concept of homosexuality was still not broadly accepted, those people are not allowed to pursue their love directly; thus, they suffer from great pain. However, as time went by, they started to fight for their rights for pursuing and expressing their affection to their love ones; during these campaigns, conflicts could not be avoided. The concept of “ all men are created equal” can be the explanation to the fight. Everyone has his/ her right to live in his/ her own style and pursue happiness. Homosexuality is nature born; therefore, they should not be treated as abnormal people. I was attracted by a website whose topic was “ My son is a gay. What Should I do?” because the topic did express the “ fear” of some parents when finding out that their kids are gays or lesbians. The same website also mentioned that a research was done and pointed out homosexuality happened not only in human world but also in animals’. In China, the public was said to accept this concept in the Han Dynasty. It was not until the discrimination of homosexuality spread into China that the Chinese started to show despise on them. Therefore, we should start to change the stereotype among those people by heart and not be influenced by the hatred, which was not based on equality.
The gay Liberation Movement was said to have drawn much of its inspiration from other revolutionary groups of the 1960s, especially feminism and the Black Liberation Movement. However, there were still differences: women and people of color could not change their appearances but most homosexuals could pass for straight. Some homosexuals disobeyed their wills simply because of the social prejudice against them. Based on Louis Giannetti’s Understanding Movies(1997), the eleventh edition, the ideology of the issue had brought in the thrive in queer cinema.
In Understanding Movies, the author mentioned the psychology of the homosexuals, and the different theories on the issue. The researchers such as Kinsey Masters and Johnson regarded all sexual behavior as learned, not innate. Freud thought that the sexual tendency was influenced by social conventions so everybody must learn what the “ normal” sexes were. On the other hand, other researchers believe that homosexuality is inborn. Recent medical findings proved that the brain structure is the cause of sexual tendency, and such theories were to explain that homosexuals did not choose to be gays/ lesbians themselves. As for them, their sexual tendency is natural. According to the Understanding Movies, 10 percent of the American population is homosexual and as high as 33 percent of people have had at least one homosexual experience; the result of the investigation was not surprising at all because everybody has his/ her masculine and feminine sides as can be seen in our daily lives.
Some people would not tell people the truth if they were homosexuals for fear that they might be discriminated; however, there were still a lot of people willing to accept the fact and tell the public. For example, some actors and actresses told the public that they are homosexuals, and much to their surprise, they were still popular and favored by people. McKellen is a leading gay activist, and also a famous actor.
After announcing that he was a gay, McKellen said that his career had taken off, and he had enough of being a gay icon. From Mckellen’s example, we knew that his career did go smoothly well, and even better after he came out of the closet; people did not treat him as a weirdo.
Some people held the opinion that people decide our sexes according to productive organs but could we not put people into categories according to other physical features? This question in a way showed us why some people disliked the idea of being homosexuality. Human beings had sex for two reasons: firstly, for pleasure, and secondly, for passing on the succeeding races. To consider the latter function of having sex, here comes a question: how could people produce babies if they are in the same gender? There was no such a way to achieve the purpose for sure. But if we focus on the individuals’ rights of pursuing happiness, there should not be obstructions, either. In this aspect, why could a guy not like the same gender as himself/ herself? Of course he/ she could. This is the problem of self- identification. Here comes another problem: Even those homosexuals accept themselves, how can they get rid of the stereotype of the public? The answer was quite simple: Now that the homosexuals have the right to seek for their loved ones, people also have their right to express their own ideas. We could not bother everyone’s thoughts and attitudes toward things. Thus, homosexuals do not need to care about the stereotypes in other people’s mind because all human beings have their choices. As long as homosexuals accept themselves first, they could live in broaden minds. There is still a long way to go to shift the public’s concept but we could still make progress steps by steps.
The nuclei of human cells are consisted of twenty-two autosomes (which are to determine the characteristics of individuals’) and two sex chromosomes (which are to determine the gender of people). In females, the sex chromosomes are the two X chromosomes, while in males’, the sex chromosomes contain one X chromosome and one Y chromosome. The occurrence of the Y chromosome is what causes the differences between males and females. LeVay, Tim had done the examination on the structure within the human brain and the genetic link of male homosexuality, and we could see his theory in Gay Genes, Revisited. Different sides of the scientists pointed out their own perspectives on the topic, homosexuality. Some scientists said that homosexuality had something to do with the brains. While others were arguing whether homosexuality was the cause of chromosome X. The latter thought that the homosexuals might have the sexual tendency by being inherited exclusively from the mothers. However, all these arguments led to disputes. Scientists on both sides questioned the truthfulness of the experiment results of each other.
Also, when talking of the cultural aspect on Homosexuality in Gay Genes, Revisited, it was said that the cause of the sexual tendency was due to the fact that the relationships between gays and their fathers in the childhood were not as good as those with their mothers. Through the research of the scientists, we could know better about the issue of homosexuality in different perspective not merely from the cultural aspects but also from the scientific perspectives.
Epstein, Robert also mentioned that homosexuality is nature born in his papers: Do Gays Have a Choice? In the other words, Robert held the opinion that homosexuality has something to do with the chromosome. The author pointed out that most people might think that there were deep-rooted stereotypes against gays and lesbians in the public; however, as time passed by, the author thought that sometimes it was the homosexuality that had the “ discrimination” against themselves. They searched for therapies so as to change themselves into so-called “ ordinary people” (straight guys.) Some may succeed eventually, but most could not. Most people have the tendency of being homosexuality; thus, the environment may have effects on them and made them fall in love with the same gender of themselves. Such theory could explain why some people would fall in love with both genders. From the other aspect, some homosexuality could not change their sexual tendency at all if they have strong genetic tendencies.
There was an example of a couple in Do Gays Have a Choice? Matt Avery was once a gay for most of his young adulthood, but afterwards, he married a woman. With this example, some people claim that Matt’s life was based on an illusion and that he could not possibly be a good father and husband. The author said the reason why Matt ran back inside the closet was that he was pressured by the society, which dislikes and shuns guys.
The same article also talked of religious cause. According to the book of Leviticus, homosexuality is what was prohibited in males and could be punished to death. As we know, religions in not only Eastern world but also Western societies have always the strong influence on the public. This served as another example to explain why the root of stereotype over homosexuality was so deep through years. In addition, in previous years, some therapists even held that homosexuality was a psychological disorder. Fortunately, this concept had changed afterwards. It was Gays themselves tired of being viewed as freaks of the society started to assert that they were not sick. By defending themselves, it was a nice change of their thoughts.
The author did not neglect the cause of cultural factors. To talk of the influence of the environment, Matt’s example could also explain it. Matt once said he thought that his whole life was defined by whomever he was with. This could be the support of the viewpoints of social influence.
Some people might think that gays do not have in a traditional sense of raising up a family. On hearing this, gays may defend that they did take care of their own family. All people had the concept of bonds either with their family or with the other people. That was to say, people should not have the misconception among gays and lesbians. Being homosexuals does not mean that they do not want to have babies. Is that being a gay just like committing crimes? Why do people not embrace them friendly but condemning them instead? The homosexuals raised such questions when they were questioned whether or not they feel weird of themselves for not wanting babies; that aroused the struggle and pain in homosexuals’ minds.
In sum, a person should not be measured by the opinions of others; however, it is still difficult for people to neglect the fact that there are still people out there discriminating homosexuals, and then cause the shameful feelings in gays and lesbians’ hearts. There was no doubt that it was a challenge and a struggle for those being the minority. Most people are more respectful to one another nowadays and even though it may take time to change the stereotypes within the society, it is still definitely a top priority for homosexuals to accept themselves first. Homosexuals could only feel relieved and truly accept themselves when they themselves get rid of the stereotype first. Could Gay be Gay? Mostly, it is the homosexuals themselves that cannot fight against the discrimination toward them. They considered much more things than the public. In other words, they care the public thoughts too much. In other words, they think the public might not accept them and such idea cause their fears to accept themselves, but on the other hand, they neglect the fact that nowadays, most people do treat them equally. The above-mentioned can be proved in the video (Could Gay be Gay?). There was a boy who happened to be a gay, showed his panic. There was a guess that instead of being sincere, people may act out that they could accept homosexuals in nowadays society. However, it was not a serious problem because we could never guess what is in people’s minds. Therefore, to accept oneself is what everyone should do but don’t worry about the questions that one cannot manage.
References
Giannetti, L. (1997). Understanding Movies, the eleventh edition. In Ideology- Queer Cinema ( pp.483-p.489). New jersey: Pearson
LeVay, Tim; Hamer.(1994, May) Scientific American. Gay Genes, Revisited. (Vol. 270 Issue 5, pp44) [ABSTRACT FROM PUBLISHER] (AN 14327844)
Epstein, Robert. (2006 Feb/Mar) Scientific American Mind. Do Gays Have a Choice? (Vol. 17 Issue 1, pp50)
From:http://web.ebscohost.com/ehost/pdf?vid=3&hid=3&sid=0ef80f05-7ac0-4011-a81c-1967ab28d5c1%40sessionmgr9
“Gay son.” (2004, September 7)
From: http://www.jamessteed.com/gayson/gayson.htm
“ Could Gay be Gay?”(n.d.).
From: http://www.youtube.com/v/V1iEpBsNIBU&hl=zh_TW&fs=1
2009年1月10日 星期六
E-resources
Enchanted-Happy Working Song
Friends-Janice
When Night is Falling
Maltese Falcon
Run Lora Run
Friends-Janice
When Night is Falling
Maltese Falcon
Run Lora Run
2009年1月8日 星期四
PEER MSN
Peers(msn):
Reflection:
In my research paper, I typed the key word "gay" to find the relevant information on the topic. However, it was too broad. I should narrow down the range of the key words so as to get more direct information. after finding all the resources that I need, the most important thing is that I need to paraphrase them in my own ideas. Though as for some ideas I prefer to simply quote them because I think that it may be more persuasive. Besides, I have to pay attention to the coherence problems in the articles, and spelling problems as well. I should go over the article after it was done and polish it. Namely, to make the article more fluently.
蘇菲亞 說:
1. Paper outlines including the title and 1-3 keywords (e.g., euthanasia, gay and lesbian marriage, animal rights, etc). Do you search information using these keywords? In English or Chinese? Why?
Title: Could Gay be Gay?
Key words: Gay
I do research information through this keyword in both English and Chinese because I think that I could gather more information on the topic by doing so.
蘇菲亞 說:
However, I found mostly English version.
Elsa 說:
You just use a key word "Gay"?
蘇菲亞 說:
Yes
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and then you could find many articles
蘇菲亞 說:
now that it is a broad topic it is easy to find information.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so great and convenient
Elsa 說:
Then, you must be tired to find the information you want. Because there are too many information
Claire 說:
Both English and Chinese?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and maybe you can narrow your key words
蘇菲亞 說:
But I ONLY USE ONE WORD
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so the information you find may to be too broad for you
Elsa 說:
That's ok. If you can find the source you want.
Claire 說:
There must have lots of article
Elsa 說:
But you might spend more time.
蘇菲亞 說:
So what do you think I shoul;ld type?
Claire 說:
So you do the topic in extensive way?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the topic you choose may to broad for you
蘇菲亞 說:
SO WHAT SHOULD I DO
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
you can try to key in the keywords longer and explain detailly about your subject
Elsa 說:
It depends on what aspects you want to discuss.
Claire 說:
To narrow down the certain point of gay
蘇菲亞 說:
OK
蘇菲亞 說:
( 1 )
Ideology- Queer Cinema.
Louis Giannetti (1997). Understanding Movies, the eleventh edition, p.483-p.489. New jersey.
Intended audiences: Those who are interested in analyzing movies.
I think that it is quite interesting for it explain the ideology on homosexuality by analyzing the movies through media that we are familiar with.
蘇菲亞 說:
This is my citation
蘇菲亞 說:
The answer to the second question
蘇菲亞 說:
( 2 )
Gay Genes, Revisited.
LeVay, Tim; Hamer. Scientific American(1994, May), Vol. 270 Issue 5, p44, 6p Abstract: Two pieces of evidence, a structure within the human brain and a genetic link, point to a biological component for male homosexuality [ABSTRACT FROM PUBLISHER] (AN 14327844)
Intended audiences: Academic paper.
蘇菲亞 說:
The author gave out some results of the experiments and tries to convince the readers his point of view.
Difficulties: Some of the concepts in the articles are expressed in the scientific way. Thus, I may feel confused.
蘇菲亞 說:
Do Gays Have a Choice?
Epstein, Robert. Scientific American Mind, Feb/Mar2006, Vol. 17 Issue 1, p50, 8p Abstract: Science offers a clear and surprising answer to a controversial question [ABSTRACT FROM AUTHOR] (AN 23432303)
From http://web.ebscohost.com/ehost/pdf?vid=3&hid=3&sid=0ef80f05-7ac0-4011-a81c-1967ab28d5c1%40sessionmgr9
Intended audiences: Academic paper.
蘇菲亞 說:
The author stated different factors in the article that explain the cause of the sexual tendency. He did make his idea clear.
蘇菲亞 說:
( 4 )
Anonymous (September 7, 2004). Taiwan.
Web Site: http://www.jamessteed.com/gayson/gayson.htm
Intended audiences: General people. The web site contained the explanation of homosexuality so that people may get more information on the topic. By knowing more information, we might have less discrimination among them.
蘇菲亞 說:
( 5 )
Could Gay be Gay?
Anonymous
Web Site: http://www.youtube.com/v/V1iEpBsNIBU&hl=zh_TW&fs=1
Intended audiences: General people. Through the explanation on the topic, most of people could get to know more about gays/ lesbians ( their thoughts for example).
蘇菲亞 說:
That's all to the second question.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the first citation :i think it is great that you use the book we have studied in this semester as your reference
蘇菲亞 說:
The fact is you have to attack me
Claire 說:
Ideology!!!Interesting!(When night is falling )
蘇菲亞 說:
I don't know whether I had do the citation properly.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the idea is great
蘇菲亞 說:
BUT
Elsa 說:
How do you use the second reference in your final paper? Since you said you are confused about that.
蘇菲亞 說:
OH YEAH
蘇菲亞 說:
I mean some of the idea it mentioned in the article.
蘇菲亞 說:
Thanks
Claire 說:
Because it's a academic paper ?
蘇菲亞 說:
I WOULD REVISE THE SENTENSE
蘇菲亞 說:
Yes
Elsa 說:
You can add that if you agree with the standpoints in the sources.
Claire 說:
Are there lot of new terms should be explained?
蘇菲亞 說:
No.
蘇菲亞 說:
It's not the term but the words it used in the articles.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so you creat th eterm by tourself?
Claire 說:
So how do you overcpme the problem?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
sorry foe misspelling
蘇菲亞 說:
3. How do you use these sources to support your own argument/opinions or as references for facts? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
I do quote some words, and sentences in my final paper because they supported my opinion.
蘇菲亞 說:
4. What revisions have you made compared to your annotations? What drives you to make revisions? Do you polish your language and pay attention to cohesion and coherence in your final paper?
I made some revisions by referring to the comments I received from peer working.
蘇菲亞 說:
5. What perspectives have you changed compared to your issue paper? Did you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
I did add my peer’s opinion in my issue paper because they pointed out the shortcomings that I did not realize before.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so do you paraphrase the qoutes
蘇菲亞 說:
Before i want to change my position and focus on the cutural environment
蘇菲亞 說:
but i found out that all of the infromation that i have found was about the scientific problems
蘇菲亞 說:
yes i do qoute
Elsa 說:
So you need to find more evidence instead of the scientific problems
Claire 說:
What words do you quote?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the most important thing is you need to paraphrase them in your own ideas
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
did you do that?(attacking)
蘇菲亞 說:
(i can feel that
蘇菲亞 說:
it's hard to say it over here
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i know that you have paraphrased them
蘇菲亞 說:
i had put the quotation mark in my paragraph
蘇菲亞 說:
actually i quote
蘇菲亞 說:
and also paraphrased
Claire 說:
Do you have coherence between the paragraph?
Elsa 說:
Some conjunctions
蘇菲亞 說:
I...am not sure about that
蘇菲亞 說:
i think i did....吧
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
do make the mistake as same as me
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
don't
Elsa 說:
Well. You can do it better when you looking your sentence again.
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
Claire 說:
Check it again!
蘇菲亞 說:
so is that all?
蘇菲亞 說:
OK!
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
when i read your annatation, i find that overally there are not some serious problems in your article
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the grammar and spelling is ok
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the coherence is not too bad
Elsa 說:
You did a good job.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
but you stll have to polish them into a btter one
Claire 說:
serious problems?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
better
Claire 說:
So?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the conjuntions
Elsa 說:
conjunctions
Claire 說:
OH! OK
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so the next parts?
Elsa 說:
I can start to present
Claire 說:
OK
Claire 說:
Abortion!
Elsa 說:
Abortion: A Serious Challenge between Morality and Women’s right
Elsa 說:
key words:abortion, women's human rights
Elsa 說:
I search the information on internet database with these words in English way. Because I want to know more about the cases and the world trend of abortion. By using the keywords, I do find many information and some of them support to my opinion.
Elsa 說:
1. Women's consideration (Reasons for abortion)
2. Human rights (Research about the abortion laws)
3. Looking from another standpoints ( the thoughts of those who anti-abortion)
Elsa 說:
That's the outlines of my paper.
Elsa 說:
2. Topics/themes in four annotations and their intended audiences
Elsa 說:
1) The first annotation is videos about the opinions of Obama, the president-elect in America. He thinks that limit the liberty of abortion may harm women's human right.
Audience:
People who care about the relationship between abortion and government.
Claire 說:
So you emphasize women's human rights?
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Elsa 說:
That's my main point.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap
Claire 說:
Do you have other position?
Claire 說:
Law ?
Claire 說:
Law of abortion!
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Claire 說:
you say you want to mention
Elsa 說:
(3) The third annotation is the world trend of abortion law.
Elsa 說:
Audience:
People who do not know the real condition about abortion around the world.
Elsa 說:
4) The fourth annotation is the reasons for those who oppose aborton.
Audience:
People who want to know why be anti-abortion
蘇菲亞 說:
I THINK THAT YOUR VIEWPOINT IS CLEAR
蘇菲亞 說:
AND PRECISE
Claire 說:
Yup~
Elsa 說:
Thank you!
Elsa 說:
3. Main points in each source that support your own argument/opinions.Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
(1) Obama's ideas have in common with my opinions. No woman make the decision casually.
(2) Those reasons can make people to t
Elsa 說:
(2) Those reasons can make people to think the necessity of abortion.
(3) Liberalization is the main trend of abortion laws.
(4) Show the purpose that those who oppose abortion might because some religion or the slogan of humanism, instead of caring for women and children.
Claire 說:
Is any problem you encounter in your paper?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and you make three points in your paper
蘇菲亞 說:
SO YOU QOUTE
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
discuss the three reasons
Elsa 說:
I do qoute some words in my article
Elsa 說:
But not much.
蘇菲亞 說:
OK
Claire 說:
What peron do you quote?
蘇菲亞 說:
I THINK EVERYBODY'S PROBLEMS IS THAT WE SHOULD CHECK THE SPELLING
蘇菲亞 說:
THE COHERENCE
蘇菲亞 說:
THE CONJUNCTION
Elsa 說:
Yes. So the peer feedback is important
Elsa 說:
I do add my peer's opinions, because they pointed out the weak point of my article. I know how to make my article more fluent by their opinions.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
YES I ALSO AGREE THAT
Elsa 說:
To the fifth question.
Elsa 說:
(1) The weak point of my article is that I could not deny that those unborn babies have human rights too.
Elsa 說:
2) I added more ideas to my final paper
1. The world trend
2. The uniqe condition of each woman
3. Looking from the other points of view (anti-abortion)
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
蘇菲亞 說:
so you have stated your position
蘇菲亞 說:
that's cool
Claire 說:
Pefect~
Elsa 說:
But I do not know how to conquer the weak point
Elsa 說:
I just avoid to talk about that part...
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
it is really hard to correct
蘇菲亞 說:
if i were you, i would also avoid that part...
Claire 說:
The coherence?
Elsa 說:
Well... I am not sure whether my articles is coherent or not
Claire 說:
do you work strongly?
Claire 說:
And.........
Claire 說:
you told me that you have 6 pages "only"
Elsa 說:
I would try to make my article fluent
蘇菲亞 說:
i think we should go on to the next person
Elsa 說:
Ok.
蘇菲亞 說:
what is human right
蘇菲亞 說:
i mean at the same time now
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I'M NEXT
Claire 說:
Elsa works very hard!
蘇菲亞 說:
because elsa and claire had the same topic
蘇菲亞 說:
almost the same
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
SO CLAIRE
Claire 說:
different position
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
YOUR ARE THE NEXT ONE?
Elsa 說:
So hurry up
Claire 說:
I'm ok
Elsa 說:
Tell us the outlines in your paper
Claire 說:
abotion mental health
Claire 說:
abortion
蘇菲亞 說:
together
Claire 說:
My main outline includes abortion, and I would quote others to persuade others by using lot of science research and essay. The key words are the mental help, and psychology of abortion. Most information are English, because there are much more information what I want in the foreign website.
Claire 說:
These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97,
Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News,
, and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times.
蘇菲亞 說:
mental help, and psychology of abortion.
蘇菲亞 說:
so you deal with the mental problem
Claire 說:
These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97,
Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News,
, and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times.
Claire 說:
Yes
Claire 說:
psychology of abortion
Elsa 說:
So how did you deal with the other points of view such as woman's right?
Claire 說:
I choose to be pro-lifer.
Elsa 說:
How did you conquer the weak point?
Claire 說:
I use others' words
蘇菲亞 說:
or baby's right
Claire 說:
such as the Pope
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap
蘇菲亞 說:
baby's psychological problem
Claire 說:
It's psychological problem of women
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i agree with sophia
Claire 說:
Do you mean that I should develop baby's psychological problem?
Claire 說:
Then I can try.
蘇菲亞 說:
no
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
if you have enough time
Claire 說:
Ok
蘇菲亞 說:
because that's also elsa's problem
Claire 說:
Thanks
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
otherwise you must reorganize your issue paper
蘇菲亞 說:
both of you focus on the adults
蘇菲亞 說:
or don't point out the word "baby"
Elsa 說:
I see.
蘇菲亞 說:
otherwise you will have confrontation in your paper
Claire 說:
OK
蘇菲亞 說:
joyce
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
ok
Claire 說:
come to Joyce!!
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
The relationship between cosmetic surgery and the self-image
Why the trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is my topic(present)
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
Focus on three parts:
1. People are getting higher and higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
2. The media, the mass images of the beautiful celebrities, and the advertisements about the cosmetic surgery
3. The self-image, self-reflection and the social values
Social values affect the way we look ourselves.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so i make a deep discussion about these three topics
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
Search information in the key words
English > “self image” “plastic surgery”
Mostly in the website of the “All Business”
http://www.allbusiness.com/
Chinese> “整形文化” “自我形象” easy to get the full ideas and easy to understand
website全國碩博士論文資訊網
http://etds.ncl.edu.tw/theabs/index.html
Elsa 說:
I think that your standpoints are clear.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
thx
蘇菲亞 說:
but
蘇菲亞 說:
i don't know your viewpoints
蘇菲亞 說:
you support?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is just the outline
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
my ideas will be in the article
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i just categoly them
蘇菲亞 說:
just remind you
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i know that i will pay more attentio non this part
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
it is also my main problem thx for Sophia
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-image psychology
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Claire 說:
From TV! It's cool.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
every annotation stands for one point
蘇菲亞 說:
AND SALES
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so there are three stand points
蘇菲亞 說:
YOU FIND LOTS OF INFORMATION
Elsa 說:
Don't forget to express your views when you use them.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
are you praising me?
蘇菲亞 說:
IN THE CONCLUSION PART YOU MIGHT WANT TO ORGANIZE THEM AGAIN IN BRIEF WORDS
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
The higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
The higher standard about aesthetic
>contribute to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year
The pursuit of attractiveness and good identification are the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-imThis article puts much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives.
age psychology
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself The cultural surroundings which affected the social values people have to self-image and the appearance.
The massive images of the celebrities and advertisements
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Film clip
The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
every annatation stands for one point
Elsa 說:
Do you have problems when you use these information?
蘇菲亞 說:
for example the meaning
蘇菲亞 說:
or some conflict
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yes, at first i can't find any essay on the internet
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
after a long long stuggling, i found and useful website
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
that's the begining of my annatation
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
that's why i post my articles in the blogger so late
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so sophia has pointed out that
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I do quote some phrases in my paper but not much. Mostly I paraphrase the original articles and use my own words to explain.
蘇菲亞 說:
i think that you could qoate
蘇菲亞 說:
sometimes directly
蘇菲亞 說:
to be more persuasive
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Elsa 說:
Using the words from convincing resouces will helpful
Claire 說:
That's right~
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap i agree with you
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i will improve that
蘇菲亞 說:
SO ANY PROBLEMS?
蘇菲亞 說:
DID YOU CHANGE YOUR POSITION
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I THINK NOT
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I AGREE WITH THE POINTS
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and i agree with the attitude toward cosmetic surgery
Elsa 說:
If there is no problems...
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is the end maybe
Reflection:
In my research paper, I typed the key word "gay" to find the relevant information on the topic. However, it was too broad. I should narrow down the range of the key words so as to get more direct information. after finding all the resources that I need, the most important thing is that I need to paraphrase them in my own ideas. Though as for some ideas I prefer to simply quote them because I think that it may be more persuasive. Besides, I have to pay attention to the coherence problems in the articles, and spelling problems as well. I should go over the article after it was done and polish it. Namely, to make the article more fluently.
蘇菲亞 說:
1. Paper outlines including the title and 1-3 keywords (e.g., euthanasia, gay and lesbian marriage, animal rights, etc). Do you search information using these keywords? In English or Chinese? Why?
Title: Could Gay be Gay?
Key words: Gay
I do research information through this keyword in both English and Chinese because I think that I could gather more information on the topic by doing so.
蘇菲亞 說:
However, I found mostly English version.
Elsa 說:
You just use a key word "Gay"?
蘇菲亞 說:
Yes
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and then you could find many articles
蘇菲亞 說:
now that it is a broad topic it is easy to find information.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so great and convenient
Elsa 說:
Then, you must be tired to find the information you want. Because there are too many information
Claire 說:
Both English and Chinese?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and maybe you can narrow your key words
蘇菲亞 說:
But I ONLY USE ONE WORD
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so the information you find may to be too broad for you
Elsa 說:
That's ok. If you can find the source you want.
Claire 說:
There must have lots of article
Elsa 說:
But you might spend more time.
蘇菲亞 說:
So what do you think I shoul;ld type?
Claire 說:
So you do the topic in extensive way?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the topic you choose may to broad for you
蘇菲亞 說:
SO WHAT SHOULD I DO
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
you can try to key in the keywords longer and explain detailly about your subject
Elsa 說:
It depends on what aspects you want to discuss.
Claire 說:
To narrow down the certain point of gay
蘇菲亞 說:
OK
蘇菲亞 說:
( 1 )
Ideology- Queer Cinema.
Louis Giannetti (1997). Understanding Movies, the eleventh edition, p.483-p.489. New jersey.
Intended audiences: Those who are interested in analyzing movies.
I think that it is quite interesting for it explain the ideology on homosexuality by analyzing the movies through media that we are familiar with.
蘇菲亞 說:
This is my citation
蘇菲亞 說:
The answer to the second question
蘇菲亞 說:
( 2 )
Gay Genes, Revisited.
LeVay, Tim; Hamer. Scientific American(1994, May), Vol. 270 Issue 5, p44, 6p Abstract: Two pieces of evidence, a structure within the human brain and a genetic link, point to a biological component for male homosexuality [ABSTRACT FROM PUBLISHER] (AN 14327844)
Intended audiences: Academic paper.
蘇菲亞 說:
The author gave out some results of the experiments and tries to convince the readers his point of view.
Difficulties: Some of the concepts in the articles are expressed in the scientific way. Thus, I may feel confused.
蘇菲亞 說:
Do Gays Have a Choice?
Epstein, Robert. Scientific American Mind, Feb/Mar2006, Vol. 17 Issue 1, p50, 8p Abstract: Science offers a clear and surprising answer to a controversial question [ABSTRACT FROM AUTHOR] (AN 23432303)
From http://web.ebscohost.com/ehost/pdf?vid=3&hid=3&sid=0ef80f05-7ac0-4011-a81c-1967ab28d5c1%40sessionmgr9
Intended audiences: Academic paper.
蘇菲亞 說:
The author stated different factors in the article that explain the cause of the sexual tendency. He did make his idea clear.
蘇菲亞 說:
( 4 )
Anonymous (September 7, 2004). Taiwan.
Web Site: http://www.jamessteed.com/gayson/gayson.htm
Intended audiences: General people. The web site contained the explanation of homosexuality so that people may get more information on the topic. By knowing more information, we might have less discrimination among them.
蘇菲亞 說:
( 5 )
Could Gay be Gay?
Anonymous
Web Site: http://www.youtube.com/v/V1iEpBsNIBU&hl=zh_TW&fs=1
Intended audiences: General people. Through the explanation on the topic, most of people could get to know more about gays/ lesbians ( their thoughts for example).
蘇菲亞 說:
That's all to the second question.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the first citation :i think it is great that you use the book we have studied in this semester as your reference
蘇菲亞 說:
The fact is you have to attack me
Claire 說:
Ideology!!!Interesting!(When night is falling )
蘇菲亞 說:
I don't know whether I had do the citation properly.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the idea is great
蘇菲亞 說:
BUT
Elsa 說:
How do you use the second reference in your final paper? Since you said you are confused about that.
蘇菲亞 說:
OH YEAH
蘇菲亞 說:
I mean some of the idea it mentioned in the article.
蘇菲亞 說:
Thanks
Claire 說:
Because it's a academic paper ?
蘇菲亞 說:
I WOULD REVISE THE SENTENSE
蘇菲亞 說:
Yes
Elsa 說:
You can add that if you agree with the standpoints in the sources.
Claire 說:
Are there lot of new terms should be explained?
蘇菲亞 說:
No.
蘇菲亞 說:
It's not the term but the words it used in the articles.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so you creat th eterm by tourself?
Claire 說:
So how do you overcpme the problem?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
sorry foe misspelling
蘇菲亞 說:
3. How do you use these sources to support your own argument/opinions or as references for facts? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
I do quote some words, and sentences in my final paper because they supported my opinion.
蘇菲亞 說:
4. What revisions have you made compared to your annotations? What drives you to make revisions? Do you polish your language and pay attention to cohesion and coherence in your final paper?
I made some revisions by referring to the comments I received from peer working.
蘇菲亞 說:
5. What perspectives have you changed compared to your issue paper? Did you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
I did add my peer’s opinion in my issue paper because they pointed out the shortcomings that I did not realize before.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so do you paraphrase the qoutes
蘇菲亞 說:
Before i want to change my position and focus on the cutural environment
蘇菲亞 說:
but i found out that all of the infromation that i have found was about the scientific problems
蘇菲亞 說:
yes i do qoute
Elsa 說:
So you need to find more evidence instead of the scientific problems
Claire 說:
What words do you quote?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the most important thing is you need to paraphrase them in your own ideas
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
did you do that?(attacking)
蘇菲亞 說:
(i can feel that
蘇菲亞 說:
it's hard to say it over here
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i know that you have paraphrased them
蘇菲亞 說:
i had put the quotation mark in my paragraph
蘇菲亞 說:
actually i quote
蘇菲亞 說:
and also paraphrased
Claire 說:
Do you have coherence between the paragraph?
Elsa 說:
Some conjunctions
蘇菲亞 說:
I...am not sure about that
蘇菲亞 說:
i think i did....吧
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
do make the mistake as same as me
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
don't
Elsa 說:
Well. You can do it better when you looking your sentence again.
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
Claire 說:
Check it again!
蘇菲亞 說:
so is that all?
蘇菲亞 說:
OK!
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
when i read your annatation, i find that overally there are not some serious problems in your article
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the grammar and spelling is ok
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the coherence is not too bad
Elsa 說:
You did a good job.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
but you stll have to polish them into a btter one
Claire 說:
serious problems?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
better
Claire 說:
So?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the conjuntions
Elsa 說:
conjunctions
Claire 說:
OH! OK
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so the next parts?
Elsa 說:
I can start to present
Claire 說:
OK
Claire 說:
Abortion!
Elsa 說:
Abortion: A Serious Challenge between Morality and Women’s right
Elsa 說:
key words:abortion, women's human rights
Elsa 說:
I search the information on internet database with these words in English way. Because I want to know more about the cases and the world trend of abortion. By using the keywords, I do find many information and some of them support to my opinion.
Elsa 說:
1. Women's consideration (Reasons for abortion)
2. Human rights (Research about the abortion laws)
3. Looking from another standpoints ( the thoughts of those who anti-abortion)
Elsa 說:
That's the outlines of my paper.
Elsa 說:
2. Topics/themes in four annotations and their intended audiences
Elsa 說:
1) The first annotation is videos about the opinions of Obama, the president-elect in America. He thinks that limit the liberty of abortion may harm women's human right.
Audience:
People who care about the relationship between abortion and government.
Claire 說:
So you emphasize women's human rights?
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Elsa 說:
That's my main point.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap
Claire 說:
Do you have other position?
Claire 說:
Law ?
Claire 說:
Law of abortion!
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Claire 說:
you say you want to mention
Elsa 說:
(3) The third annotation is the world trend of abortion law.
Elsa 說:
Audience:
People who do not know the real condition about abortion around the world.
Elsa 說:
4) The fourth annotation is the reasons for those who oppose aborton.
Audience:
People who want to know why be anti-abortion
蘇菲亞 說:
I THINK THAT YOUR VIEWPOINT IS CLEAR
蘇菲亞 說:
AND PRECISE
Claire 說:
Yup~
Elsa 說:
Thank you!
Elsa 說:
3. Main points in each source that support your own argument/opinions.Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
(1) Obama's ideas have in common with my opinions. No woman make the decision casually.
(2) Those reasons can make people to t
Elsa 說:
(2) Those reasons can make people to think the necessity of abortion.
(3) Liberalization is the main trend of abortion laws.
(4) Show the purpose that those who oppose abortion might because some religion or the slogan of humanism, instead of caring for women and children.
Claire 說:
Is any problem you encounter in your paper?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and you make three points in your paper
蘇菲亞 說:
SO YOU QOUTE
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
discuss the three reasons
Elsa 說:
I do qoute some words in my article
Elsa 說:
But not much.
蘇菲亞 說:
OK
Claire 說:
What peron do you quote?
蘇菲亞 說:
I THINK EVERYBODY'S PROBLEMS IS THAT WE SHOULD CHECK THE SPELLING
蘇菲亞 說:
THE COHERENCE
蘇菲亞 說:
THE CONJUNCTION
Elsa 說:
Yes. So the peer feedback is important
Elsa 說:
I do add my peer's opinions, because they pointed out the weak point of my article. I know how to make my article more fluent by their opinions.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
YES I ALSO AGREE THAT
Elsa 說:
To the fifth question.
Elsa 說:
(1) The weak point of my article is that I could not deny that those unborn babies have human rights too.
Elsa 說:
2) I added more ideas to my final paper
1. The world trend
2. The uniqe condition of each woman
3. Looking from the other points of view (anti-abortion)
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
蘇菲亞 說:
so you have stated your position
蘇菲亞 說:
that's cool
Claire 說:
Pefect~
Elsa 說:
But I do not know how to conquer the weak point
Elsa 說:
I just avoid to talk about that part...
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
it is really hard to correct
蘇菲亞 說:
if i were you, i would also avoid that part...
Claire 說:
The coherence?
Elsa 說:
Well... I am not sure whether my articles is coherent or not
Claire 說:
do you work strongly?
Claire 說:
And.........
Claire 說:
you told me that you have 6 pages "only"
Elsa 說:
I would try to make my article fluent
蘇菲亞 說:
i think we should go on to the next person
Elsa 說:
Ok.
蘇菲亞 說:
what is human right
蘇菲亞 說:
i mean at the same time now
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I'M NEXT
Claire 說:
Elsa works very hard!
蘇菲亞 說:
because elsa and claire had the same topic
蘇菲亞 說:
almost the same
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
SO CLAIRE
Claire 說:
different position
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
YOUR ARE THE NEXT ONE?
Elsa 說:
So hurry up
Claire 說:
I'm ok
Elsa 說:
Tell us the outlines in your paper
Claire 說:
abotion mental health
Claire 說:
abortion
蘇菲亞 說:
together
Claire 說:
My main outline includes abortion, and I would quote others to persuade others by using lot of science research and essay. The key words are the mental help, and psychology of abortion. Most information are English, because there are much more information what I want in the foreign website.
Claire 說:
These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97,
Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News,
, and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times.
蘇菲亞 說:
mental help, and psychology of abortion.
蘇菲亞 說:
so you deal with the mental problem
Claire 說:
These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97,
Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News,
, and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times.
Claire 說:
Yes
Claire 說:
psychology of abortion
Elsa 說:
So how did you deal with the other points of view such as woman's right?
Claire 說:
I choose to be pro-lifer.
Elsa 說:
How did you conquer the weak point?
Claire 說:
I use others' words
蘇菲亞 說:
or baby's right
Claire 說:
such as the Pope
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap
蘇菲亞 說:
baby's psychological problem
Claire 說:
It's psychological problem of women
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i agree with sophia
Claire 說:
Do you mean that I should develop baby's psychological problem?
Claire 說:
Then I can try.
蘇菲亞 說:
no
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
if you have enough time
Claire 說:
Ok
蘇菲亞 說:
because that's also elsa's problem
Claire 說:
Thanks
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
otherwise you must reorganize your issue paper
蘇菲亞 說:
both of you focus on the adults
蘇菲亞 說:
or don't point out the word "baby"
Elsa 說:
I see.
蘇菲亞 說:
otherwise you will have confrontation in your paper
Claire 說:
OK
蘇菲亞 說:
joyce
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
ok
Claire 說:
come to Joyce!!
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
The relationship between cosmetic surgery and the self-image
Why the trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is my topic(present)
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
Focus on three parts:
1. People are getting higher and higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
2. The media, the mass images of the beautiful celebrities, and the advertisements about the cosmetic surgery
3. The self-image, self-reflection and the social values
Social values affect the way we look ourselves.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so i make a deep discussion about these three topics
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
Search information in the key words
English > “self image” “plastic surgery”
Mostly in the website of the “All Business”
http://www.allbusiness.com/
Chinese> “整形文化” “自我形象” easy to get the full ideas and easy to understand
website全國碩博士論文資訊網
http://etds.ncl.edu.tw/theabs/index.html
Elsa 說:
I think that your standpoints are clear.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
thx
蘇菲亞 說:
but
蘇菲亞 說:
i don't know your viewpoints
蘇菲亞 說:
you support?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is just the outline
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
my ideas will be in the article
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i just categoly them
蘇菲亞 說:
just remind you
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i know that i will pay more attentio non this part
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
it is also my main problem thx for Sophia
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-image psychology
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Claire 說:
From TV! It's cool.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
every annotation stands for one point
蘇菲亞 說:
AND SALES
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so there are three stand points
蘇菲亞 說:
YOU FIND LOTS OF INFORMATION
Elsa 說:
Don't forget to express your views when you use them.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
are you praising me?
蘇菲亞 說:
IN THE CONCLUSION PART YOU MIGHT WANT TO ORGANIZE THEM AGAIN IN BRIEF WORDS
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
The higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
The higher standard about aesthetic
>contribute to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year
The pursuit of attractiveness and good identification are the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-imThis article puts much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives.
age psychology
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself The cultural surroundings which affected the social values people have to self-image and the appearance.
The massive images of the celebrities and advertisements
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Film clip
The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
every annatation stands for one point
Elsa 說:
Do you have problems when you use these information?
蘇菲亞 說:
for example the meaning
蘇菲亞 說:
or some conflict
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yes, at first i can't find any essay on the internet
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
after a long long stuggling, i found and useful website
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
that's the begining of my annatation
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
that's why i post my articles in the blogger so late
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so sophia has pointed out that
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I do quote some phrases in my paper but not much. Mostly I paraphrase the original articles and use my own words to explain.
蘇菲亞 說:
i think that you could qoate
蘇菲亞 說:
sometimes directly
蘇菲亞 說:
to be more persuasive
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Elsa 說:
Using the words from convincing resouces will helpful
Claire 說:
That's right~
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap i agree with you
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i will improve that
蘇菲亞 說:
SO ANY PROBLEMS?
蘇菲亞 說:
DID YOU CHANGE YOUR POSITION
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I THINK NOT
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I AGREE WITH THE POINTS
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and i agree with the attitude toward cosmetic surgery
Elsa 說:
If there is no problems...
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is the end maybe
Final Paper ( Draft )
黃新雅( 961002010, Sophia Huang)
Professor Liang
English Composition 2A
Jan. 8, 2009
Could Gay be Gay?
Homosexuality is a description of those people who tend to love the same gender as they are. Those people are so-called gays or lesbians. Nowadays, homosexuality has become a controversial issue that provokes the public to think whether such sexual orientation is acceptable or not because it was once said to be shameful and abnormal. “ In the closet” is a form to describe such kind of situation that they are in. Since the concept of homosexuality was still not broadly accepted, those people are not allowed to pursue their love directly; thus, they suffer from great pain. However, as time went by, they started to fight for their rights for pursuing and expressing their affection to their love ones without being repelled; during these campaigns, conflicts could not be avoided. I am of the opinion that the concept of “ all men are created equal” can be used in this situation. Everyone has his/ her right to live in his/ her own style and pursue happiness. Homosexuality is nature born for sure; therefore, they should not be treated as abnormal people. I was attracted by a website whose topic was “ My son is a gay. What Should I do?” The topic did express the “ fear” of some parents to find out there kids are gays or lesbians. As in the website, it mentioned that a research was done and pointed out homosexuality happened not only in human world but also in animals’s. In China, the public was said to accept this concept in the Han Dynasty. It was not until the discrimination of homosexuality spread into China that the Chinese started to show despise on them. Therefore, we should start to change the stereotype among those people by heart and not be influenced by the hatred that was not base on equality.
“ The gay Liberation Movement drew much of its inspiration from other revolutionary groups of the 1960s, especially feminism and the Black Liberation Movement. There was a difference, however. Whereas women and people of color could not pretend to be ‘ the other,’ most homosexuals could pass for straight. They often did- and still do- because of the social prejudice against them. ” Based on Louis Giannetti’s Understanding Movies(1997), the eleventh edition, the ideology of the issue had brought in the thrive in queer cinema.
In the paragraph, it mentioned the psychology of the homosexuals, and the different theory on the issue. The researchers as Kinsey and Masters and Johnshon regarded all sexual behavior as learned, not innate. Freud thought that the sexual tendency was influenced by social conventions. Thus, everybody must learn what’s a “ normal” sexually. On the other hand, other researchers believe that homosexuality is inborn. Recent medical findings proved that the brain structure is the cause of sexual tendency. Homosexuals did not choose to be gays/ lesbians; it chooses them. As for them, their sexual tendency is natural. Some people would not tell people the truth if they were homosexuals for fear that they might be discriminated. However, still a lot of people tend to accept the fact and told the public. According to the paragraph, 10 percent of the American population is homosexual; as high as 33 percent of people have had at least one homosexual experience. Many people believe the idea because everybody has his/ her masculine and feminine sides.
Some actors and actresses told the public the truth, and much to their surprise, they were still popular and favored by people. McKellen is a leading gay activist, and also a famous actor. He once said, “ I’ve had enough of being a gay icon! Since I came out, I keep getting all these parts and my career’s taken off. I want a quiet life. I’m going back into the closet. But I can’t get back into the closet, because it’s absolutely jam-packed full of other actors.” From the speech, we knew that his career did go smoothly well, and even better after he came out of the closet; people did not treat him as a weirdo. However, the stereotype in the public still forced most actors to stay in the closet. In my opinion, homosexuals could only feel relieved and truly accept themselves when they themselves get rid of the stereotype.
Some people held the opinion that people decide our sexes according to productive organs but could we not put people into categories according to other physical features? This question showed why some people object homosexuality. Why couldn’t a guy like the same gender of himself? Of course he/ she could. This is the problem of self- identification. Here comes another problem: Even those homosexuals accept themselves, how can they get rid of the stereotype of the public? As far as I am concerned, we could not bother everyone’s stereotype and their attitudes toward things; as long as homosexuals accept themselves first, they could live in broaden mind. There is still a long way to go to shift the public’s concept but we could still make progress steps by steps.
LeVay, Tim had done the examination on the structure within the human brain and the genetic link of male homosexuality, and we could see his theory in Gay Genes, Revisited. Different sides of the scientists pointed out their own perspective of the topic: homosexual. Some say that homosexuality had something to do with the brains. While others were arguing whether homosexuality was the cause of chromosome X. They thought that as a gay, they might have the tendency by inherited exclusively from the mothers. However, all these lead to disputes, those scientists questioned the truthfulness of the experiment result of each other. Also, it was said that the cause of the sexual tendency was due to the fact that the relationships between gays and their fathers in the childhood were not as good as those with their mother.
Through the research of the scientists, we could know better about the issue of homosexuality in different perspective not merely from the cultural aspects but also the scientific aspects.
Epstein, Robert also mentioned that homosexuality is nature born in Do Gays Have a Choice? In the other words, it has something to do with the chromosome. Most people might think that there was deep-rooted stereotype against gays and lesbians in the public. However, as time passed by, the author pointed out that sometimes it was the homosexuality that had the “ discrimination” against themselves. They searched for therapy so as to change themselves into so-called “ ordinary people” (straight guys.) Some may succeed eventually, but most could not. Most people have the tendency of being homosexuality; thus, the environment may affect some of them in some way. That is to say, some people could accept both genders. From the other aspect, some homosexuality could not change their sexual tendency if they have strong genetic tendencies.
There was an example of a couple in the article. Matt Avery was once a gay for most of his young adulthood, but afterwards, he married a woman. With this example, some people claim that Matt’s life was based on an illusion and that he could not possibly be a good father and husband. “ Pressured by the society- a society that dislikes and shuns guys- Matt has simply run back inside the closet.” “ Gay activists favor this perspective at least in part because survey data showed that people are more sympathetic to gay cause if they believe that sexual orientation is immutable.” Such expression was mentioned in the article.
The article also talked of religious cause. “ According to the book of Leviticus, homosexuality- at least when practiced by males- is prohibited, punishable by death.”As we know, religions in not only Eastern world but also Western societies have always the strong influence on the public. This served as another example to explain why the root of stereotype over homosexuality was so deep through years. In addition, in previous years, some therapists even held that homosexuality was a psychological disorder. Fortunately, this concept had changed afterwards. I had a strong feeling when I read the sentence: “ It was largely gays themselves- understandably tired of being viewed as freaks of nature- who began to assert that their orientation was not pathological.” In my opinion, it was a nice change of their thoughts.
The author did not neglect the cause of cultural factors. To talk of the influence of the environment, Matt’s example could also explain it: “ My whole life, was defined by whomever I was with- whomever I could use to make up for my own faults.” This could be the support of the viewpoints of social influence.
“ We may not have in a traditional sense of raising up a family, but we take care of our family. We are very engaged with our parents, sisters, brothers, ...I think it was a misconception that black gay men don't want to have a children but I do want to have kids, ...” “ Is that being a gay is wrong ... so how can you really ever be one hundred percent proud of who you are in the society that does not accept us?” Such conversations among gays and lesbians showed the public that they are not different at all with heterosexuality. We, as the listeners, could understand their struggle and pain in heart.
In sum, a person should not be measured by the opinions of others. One should always love and accept oneself and others would treat them equally for sure. People may say that it was easy to say than to act out. They raised such opinion: It was for sure that a person should love and accept himself but it is still difficult for people to neglect the opinions of others. This was quite sure, but as a matter of fact, it was always a challenge and a struggle for those being the minority; as far as I am concerned, most people tend to be more respectful to one another nowadays and even though it may take time to change the stereotype within the society, it is still definitely a top priority for homosexuals to accept themselves first.
Could Gay be Gay? Sometimes it is the Homosexuals themselves that cannot fight against the discrimination toward them. They considered much more things than the public. In other words, they care the public thought too much. The fact that they think the public might not accept them cause their fear to accept themselves. However, nowadays, most people do treat them equally. The above-mentioned can be proved in the Video. The boy in the video showed his panic. There was a guess that perhaps people may act out that they could accept homosexuals in nowadays society. However, I do not think that it was a serious problem because we could never guess people’s mind and I am of the opinion that once we treat people well and sincerely, they would treat us well in respect in return.
References
Ideology- Queer Cinema.
Louis Giannetti (1997). Understanding Movies, the eleventh edition, p.483-p.489. New jersey.
Gay Genes, Revisited.
LeVay, Tim; Hamer. Scientific American(1994, May), Vol. 270 Issue 5, p44, 6p Abstract: Two pieces of evidence, a structure within the human brain and a genetic link, point to a biological component for male homosexuality [ABSTRACT FROM PUBLISHER] (AN 14327844)
Do Gays Have a Choice?
Epstein, Robert. Scientific American Mind, Feb/Mar2006, Vol. 17 Issue 1, p50, 8p Abstract: Science offers a clear and surprising answer to a controversial question [ABSTRACT FROM AUTHOR] (AN 23432303) Web site:
http://web.ebscohost.com/ehost/pdf?vid=3&hid=3&sid=0ef80f05-7ac0-4011-a81c-1967ab28d5c1%40sessionmgr9
Anonymous (September 7, 2004). Taiwan.
Web Site: http://www.jamessteed.com/gayson/gayson.htm
Could Gay be Gay?
Anonymous; Web Site: http://www.youtube.com/v/V1iEpBsNIBU&hl=zh_TW&fs=1
Professor Liang
English Composition 2A
Jan. 8, 2009
Could Gay be Gay?
Homosexuality is a description of those people who tend to love the same gender as they are. Those people are so-called gays or lesbians. Nowadays, homosexuality has become a controversial issue that provokes the public to think whether such sexual orientation is acceptable or not because it was once said to be shameful and abnormal. “ In the closet” is a form to describe such kind of situation that they are in. Since the concept of homosexuality was still not broadly accepted, those people are not allowed to pursue their love directly; thus, they suffer from great pain. However, as time went by, they started to fight for their rights for pursuing and expressing their affection to their love ones without being repelled; during these campaigns, conflicts could not be avoided. I am of the opinion that the concept of “ all men are created equal” can be used in this situation. Everyone has his/ her right to live in his/ her own style and pursue happiness. Homosexuality is nature born for sure; therefore, they should not be treated as abnormal people. I was attracted by a website whose topic was “ My son is a gay. What Should I do?” The topic did express the “ fear” of some parents to find out there kids are gays or lesbians. As in the website, it mentioned that a research was done and pointed out homosexuality happened not only in human world but also in animals’s. In China, the public was said to accept this concept in the Han Dynasty. It was not until the discrimination of homosexuality spread into China that the Chinese started to show despise on them. Therefore, we should start to change the stereotype among those people by heart and not be influenced by the hatred that was not base on equality.
“ The gay Liberation Movement drew much of its inspiration from other revolutionary groups of the 1960s, especially feminism and the Black Liberation Movement. There was a difference, however. Whereas women and people of color could not pretend to be ‘ the other,’ most homosexuals could pass for straight. They often did- and still do- because of the social prejudice against them. ” Based on Louis Giannetti’s Understanding Movies(1997), the eleventh edition, the ideology of the issue had brought in the thrive in queer cinema.
In the paragraph, it mentioned the psychology of the homosexuals, and the different theory on the issue. The researchers as Kinsey and Masters and Johnshon regarded all sexual behavior as learned, not innate. Freud thought that the sexual tendency was influenced by social conventions. Thus, everybody must learn what’s a “ normal” sexually. On the other hand, other researchers believe that homosexuality is inborn. Recent medical findings proved that the brain structure is the cause of sexual tendency. Homosexuals did not choose to be gays/ lesbians; it chooses them. As for them, their sexual tendency is natural. Some people would not tell people the truth if they were homosexuals for fear that they might be discriminated. However, still a lot of people tend to accept the fact and told the public. According to the paragraph, 10 percent of the American population is homosexual; as high as 33 percent of people have had at least one homosexual experience. Many people believe the idea because everybody has his/ her masculine and feminine sides.
Some actors and actresses told the public the truth, and much to their surprise, they were still popular and favored by people. McKellen is a leading gay activist, and also a famous actor. He once said, “ I’ve had enough of being a gay icon! Since I came out, I keep getting all these parts and my career’s taken off. I want a quiet life. I’m going back into the closet. But I can’t get back into the closet, because it’s absolutely jam-packed full of other actors.” From the speech, we knew that his career did go smoothly well, and even better after he came out of the closet; people did not treat him as a weirdo. However, the stereotype in the public still forced most actors to stay in the closet. In my opinion, homosexuals could only feel relieved and truly accept themselves when they themselves get rid of the stereotype.
Some people held the opinion that people decide our sexes according to productive organs but could we not put people into categories according to other physical features? This question showed why some people object homosexuality. Why couldn’t a guy like the same gender of himself? Of course he/ she could. This is the problem of self- identification. Here comes another problem: Even those homosexuals accept themselves, how can they get rid of the stereotype of the public? As far as I am concerned, we could not bother everyone’s stereotype and their attitudes toward things; as long as homosexuals accept themselves first, they could live in broaden mind. There is still a long way to go to shift the public’s concept but we could still make progress steps by steps.
LeVay, Tim had done the examination on the structure within the human brain and the genetic link of male homosexuality, and we could see his theory in Gay Genes, Revisited. Different sides of the scientists pointed out their own perspective of the topic: homosexual. Some say that homosexuality had something to do with the brains. While others were arguing whether homosexuality was the cause of chromosome X. They thought that as a gay, they might have the tendency by inherited exclusively from the mothers. However, all these lead to disputes, those scientists questioned the truthfulness of the experiment result of each other. Also, it was said that the cause of the sexual tendency was due to the fact that the relationships between gays and their fathers in the childhood were not as good as those with their mother.
Through the research of the scientists, we could know better about the issue of homosexuality in different perspective not merely from the cultural aspects but also the scientific aspects.
Epstein, Robert also mentioned that homosexuality is nature born in Do Gays Have a Choice? In the other words, it has something to do with the chromosome. Most people might think that there was deep-rooted stereotype against gays and lesbians in the public. However, as time passed by, the author pointed out that sometimes it was the homosexuality that had the “ discrimination” against themselves. They searched for therapy so as to change themselves into so-called “ ordinary people” (straight guys.) Some may succeed eventually, but most could not. Most people have the tendency of being homosexuality; thus, the environment may affect some of them in some way. That is to say, some people could accept both genders. From the other aspect, some homosexuality could not change their sexual tendency if they have strong genetic tendencies.
There was an example of a couple in the article. Matt Avery was once a gay for most of his young adulthood, but afterwards, he married a woman. With this example, some people claim that Matt’s life was based on an illusion and that he could not possibly be a good father and husband. “ Pressured by the society- a society that dislikes and shuns guys- Matt has simply run back inside the closet.” “ Gay activists favor this perspective at least in part because survey data showed that people are more sympathetic to gay cause if they believe that sexual orientation is immutable.” Such expression was mentioned in the article.
The article also talked of religious cause. “ According to the book of Leviticus, homosexuality- at least when practiced by males- is prohibited, punishable by death.”As we know, religions in not only Eastern world but also Western societies have always the strong influence on the public. This served as another example to explain why the root of stereotype over homosexuality was so deep through years. In addition, in previous years, some therapists even held that homosexuality was a psychological disorder. Fortunately, this concept had changed afterwards. I had a strong feeling when I read the sentence: “ It was largely gays themselves- understandably tired of being viewed as freaks of nature- who began to assert that their orientation was not pathological.” In my opinion, it was a nice change of their thoughts.
The author did not neglect the cause of cultural factors. To talk of the influence of the environment, Matt’s example could also explain it: “ My whole life, was defined by whomever I was with- whomever I could use to make up for my own faults.” This could be the support of the viewpoints of social influence.
“ We may not have in a traditional sense of raising up a family, but we take care of our family. We are very engaged with our parents, sisters, brothers, ...I think it was a misconception that black gay men don't want to have a children but I do want to have kids, ...” “ Is that being a gay is wrong ... so how can you really ever be one hundred percent proud of who you are in the society that does not accept us?” Such conversations among gays and lesbians showed the public that they are not different at all with heterosexuality. We, as the listeners, could understand their struggle and pain in heart.
In sum, a person should not be measured by the opinions of others. One should always love and accept oneself and others would treat them equally for sure. People may say that it was easy to say than to act out. They raised such opinion: It was for sure that a person should love and accept himself but it is still difficult for people to neglect the opinions of others. This was quite sure, but as a matter of fact, it was always a challenge and a struggle for those being the minority; as far as I am concerned, most people tend to be more respectful to one another nowadays and even though it may take time to change the stereotype within the society, it is still definitely a top priority for homosexuals to accept themselves first.
Could Gay be Gay? Sometimes it is the Homosexuals themselves that cannot fight against the discrimination toward them. They considered much more things than the public. In other words, they care the public thought too much. The fact that they think the public might not accept them cause their fear to accept themselves. However, nowadays, most people do treat them equally. The above-mentioned can be proved in the Video. The boy in the video showed his panic. There was a guess that perhaps people may act out that they could accept homosexuals in nowadays society. However, I do not think that it was a serious problem because we could never guess people’s mind and I am of the opinion that once we treat people well and sincerely, they would treat us well in respect in return.
References
Ideology- Queer Cinema.
Louis Giannetti (1997). Understanding Movies, the eleventh edition, p.483-p.489. New jersey.
Gay Genes, Revisited.
LeVay, Tim; Hamer. Scientific American(1994, May), Vol. 270 Issue 5, p44, 6p Abstract: Two pieces of evidence, a structure within the human brain and a genetic link, point to a biological component for male homosexuality [ABSTRACT FROM PUBLISHER] (AN 14327844)
Do Gays Have a Choice?
Epstein, Robert. Scientific American Mind, Feb/Mar2006, Vol. 17 Issue 1, p50, 8p Abstract: Science offers a clear and surprising answer to a controversial question [ABSTRACT FROM AUTHOR] (AN 23432303) Web site:
http://web.ebscohost.com/ehost/pdf?vid=3&hid=3&sid=0ef80f05-7ac0-4011-a81c-1967ab28d5c1%40sessionmgr9
Anonymous (September 7, 2004). Taiwan.
Web Site: http://www.jamessteed.com/gayson/gayson.htm
Could Gay be Gay?
Anonymous; Web Site: http://www.youtube.com/v/V1iEpBsNIBU&hl=zh_TW&fs=1
Question to the position paper
1. Paper outlines including the title and 1-3 keywords (e.g., euthanasia, gay and lesbian marriage, animal rights, etc). Do you search information using these keywords? In English or Chinese? Why?
Title: Could Gay be Gay?
Key words: Gay
I do research information through this keyword in both English and Chinese because I think that I could gather more information on the topic by doing so. However, I found mostly English version.
2. 4 full citations (see the previous email for the APA formats) including library and Web sources and their intended audiences (e.g., general, academic, customers, peers and friends, other). Are you satisfied with the quality of these resources? What difficulty do you encounter?
( 1 )
Ideology- Queer Cinema.
Louis Giannetti (1997). Understanding Movies, the eleventh edition, p.483-p.489. New jersey.
Intended audiences: Those who are interested in analyzing movies.
I think that it is quite interesting for it explain the ideology on homosexuality by analyzing the movies through media that we are familiar with.
( 2 )
Gay Genes, Revisited.
LeVay, Tim; Hamer. Scientific American(1994, May), Vol. 270 Issue 5, p44, 6p Abstract: Two pieces of evidence, a structure within the human brain and a genetic link, point to a biological component for male homosexuality [ABSTRACT FROM PUBLISHER] (AN 14327844)
Intended audiences: Academic paper. The author gave out some results of the experiments and tries to convince the readers his point of view.
Difficulties: Some of the concepts in the articles are expressed in the scientific way. Thus, I may feel confused.
( 3 )
Do Gays Have a Choice?
Epstein, Robert. Scientific American Mind, Feb/Mar2006, Vol. 17 Issue 1, p50, 8p Abstract: Science offers a clear and surprising answer to a controversial question [ABSTRACT FROM AUTHOR] (AN 23432303)
From http://web.ebscohost.com/ehost/pdf?vid=3&hid=3&sid=0ef80f05-7ac0-4011-a81c-1967ab28d5c1%40sessionmgr9
Intended audiences: Academic paper. The author stated different factors in the article that explain the cause of the sexual tendency. He did make his idea clear.
( 4 )
Anonymous (September 7, 2004). Taiwan.
Web Site: http://www.jamessteed.com/gayson/gayson.htm
Intended audiences: General people. The web site contained the explanation of homosexuality so that people may get more information on the topic. By knowing more information, we might have less discrimination among them.
( 5 )
Could Gay be Gay?
Anonymous
Web Site: http://www.youtube.com/v/V1iEpBsNIBU&hl=zh_TW&fs=1
Intended audiences: General people. Through the explanation on the topic, most of people could get to know more about gays/ lesbians ( their thoughts for example).
3. How do you use these sources to support your own argument/opinions or as references for facts? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
I do quote some words, and sentences in my final paper because they supported my opinion.
4. What revisions have you made compared to your annotations? What drives you to make revisions? Do you polish your language and pay attention to cohesion and coherence in your final paper?
I made some revisions by referring to the comments I received from peer working.
5. What perspectives have you changed compared to your issue paper? Did you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
I tried to change my position from the scientific aspect to the cultural aspect. However, I decide not to do so because all the information I've found support the previous position.
Title: Could Gay be Gay?
Key words: Gay
I do research information through this keyword in both English and Chinese because I think that I could gather more information on the topic by doing so. However, I found mostly English version.
2. 4 full citations (see the previous email for the APA formats) including library and Web sources and their intended audiences (e.g., general, academic, customers, peers and friends, other). Are you satisfied with the quality of these resources? What difficulty do you encounter?
( 1 )
Ideology- Queer Cinema.
Louis Giannetti (1997). Understanding Movies, the eleventh edition, p.483-p.489. New jersey.
Intended audiences: Those who are interested in analyzing movies.
I think that it is quite interesting for it explain the ideology on homosexuality by analyzing the movies through media that we are familiar with.
( 2 )
Gay Genes, Revisited.
LeVay, Tim; Hamer. Scientific American(1994, May), Vol. 270 Issue 5, p44, 6p Abstract: Two pieces of evidence, a structure within the human brain and a genetic link, point to a biological component for male homosexuality [ABSTRACT FROM PUBLISHER] (AN 14327844)
Intended audiences: Academic paper. The author gave out some results of the experiments and tries to convince the readers his point of view.
Difficulties: Some of the concepts in the articles are expressed in the scientific way. Thus, I may feel confused.
( 3 )
Do Gays Have a Choice?
Epstein, Robert. Scientific American Mind, Feb/Mar2006, Vol. 17 Issue 1, p50, 8p Abstract: Science offers a clear and surprising answer to a controversial question [ABSTRACT FROM AUTHOR] (AN 23432303)
From http://web.ebscohost.com/ehost/pdf?vid=3&hid=3&sid=0ef80f05-7ac0-4011-a81c-1967ab28d5c1%40sessionmgr9
Intended audiences: Academic paper. The author stated different factors in the article that explain the cause of the sexual tendency. He did make his idea clear.
( 4 )
Anonymous (September 7, 2004). Taiwan.
Web Site: http://www.jamessteed.com/gayson/gayson.htm
Intended audiences: General people. The web site contained the explanation of homosexuality so that people may get more information on the topic. By knowing more information, we might have less discrimination among them.
( 5 )
Could Gay be Gay?
Anonymous
Web Site: http://www.youtube.com/v/V1iEpBsNIBU&hl=zh_TW&fs=1
Intended audiences: General people. Through the explanation on the topic, most of people could get to know more about gays/ lesbians ( their thoughts for example).
3. How do you use these sources to support your own argument/opinions or as references for facts? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
I do quote some words, and sentences in my final paper because they supported my opinion.
4. What revisions have you made compared to your annotations? What drives you to make revisions? Do you polish your language and pay attention to cohesion and coherence in your final paper?
I made some revisions by referring to the comments I received from peer working.
5. What perspectives have you changed compared to your issue paper? Did you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
I tried to change my position from the scientific aspect to the cultural aspect. However, I decide not to do so because all the information I've found support the previous position.
Reflection( 2 )
Through the second teacher-student conference, I realized that I had some habitual horrible writing styles.
Firstly, when using the word “ people,” I should pay attention to the fact that it was too abrupt to categorize all people in the same category by simply using one word. To take the sentence such as “ People like dogs.” for example, such expression is not appropriate because as we all know, not all people like dogs. This is definitely an imprudent narration. Secondly, most of the time, I do not have the ability to choose the precise words in my compositions. Sometimes I fail to recognize the words that have the same meaning in Chinese, and I do not realize the fact that they are actually not the same in English. Namely, they still have slight differences in their meanings. To take the word“ therefore,” for instance, it is the word to express an idea of suggestion, while the word “ accordingly” is to express the meaning when the idea is based as the aforementioned ones. Thirdly, I should also realize that the agreements of the verb phrases should also be considered. Sometimes I do not know that I use the wrong forms. I think that I should pay more attention to the use of the inflectional words. Fourthly, I often use the vague expressions in my writing. When using pronouns, I often made the reference's problems. The vague expressions confuse the readers. Most of the time, the readers may not know what I am referring to in my writings. To take another expression as an example, in my final papers, when I am doing the citations, I often started my paragraphs with such words as" In the paragraph." However, to think of the question: what paragraph? The readers do not read the articles before so they surely cannot get any ideas about what is in my minds. Thus, I should be precise and try to reduce the confusion that may pop into their heads.
Fifth, the use of the conjunctions is also important. By using the proper conjunctions, I can make my writings fluently. Last but no the least, when talking of writing position papers, do not use the words such as " tend to," "sometimes," "perhaps," and " I think" to express my own thoughts. It is important to strengthen my own point of views by using definite words, while I have to use those euphemism words as ways to oppose others’ people’s ideas.
As for my final papers, I found that the information that I had gathered all focused mainly on the genetic factors over homosexuality and with the environmental factors, the information mentioned only a little of them. After writing the position papers, I had once thought of changing my position- to change and focus more on the environment factors over the issue. However, up until now, after seeing all the resources at hand, I preferred not to change my positions. Otherwise, I could not stand to my positions. There is no doubt that I should use the information to support my writings.
What’s important is that I have to start to organize my final paper as soon as possible.
Firstly, when using the word “ people,” I should pay attention to the fact that it was too abrupt to categorize all people in the same category by simply using one word. To take the sentence such as “ People like dogs.” for example, such expression is not appropriate because as we all know, not all people like dogs. This is definitely an imprudent narration. Secondly, most of the time, I do not have the ability to choose the precise words in my compositions. Sometimes I fail to recognize the words that have the same meaning in Chinese, and I do not realize the fact that they are actually not the same in English. Namely, they still have slight differences in their meanings. To take the word“ therefore,” for instance, it is the word to express an idea of suggestion, while the word “ accordingly” is to express the meaning when the idea is based as the aforementioned ones. Thirdly, I should also realize that the agreements of the verb phrases should also be considered. Sometimes I do not know that I use the wrong forms. I think that I should pay more attention to the use of the inflectional words. Fourthly, I often use the vague expressions in my writing. When using pronouns, I often made the reference's problems. The vague expressions confuse the readers. Most of the time, the readers may not know what I am referring to in my writings. To take another expression as an example, in my final papers, when I am doing the citations, I often started my paragraphs with such words as" In the paragraph." However, to think of the question: what paragraph? The readers do not read the articles before so they surely cannot get any ideas about what is in my minds. Thus, I should be precise and try to reduce the confusion that may pop into their heads.
Fifth, the use of the conjunctions is also important. By using the proper conjunctions, I can make my writings fluently. Last but no the least, when talking of writing position papers, do not use the words such as " tend to," "sometimes," "perhaps," and " I think" to express my own thoughts. It is important to strengthen my own point of views by using definite words, while I have to use those euphemism words as ways to oppose others’ people’s ideas.
As for my final papers, I found that the information that I had gathered all focused mainly on the genetic factors over homosexuality and with the environmental factors, the information mentioned only a little of them. After writing the position papers, I had once thought of changing my position- to change and focus more on the environment factors over the issue. However, up until now, after seeing all the resources at hand, I preferred not to change my positions. Otherwise, I could not stand to my positions. There is no doubt that I should use the information to support my writings.
What’s important is that I have to start to organize my final paper as soon as possible.
2009年1月3日 星期六
Book Review
This semester we have learned lots of writing skills and the steps of how to write an essay from the book “Steps to Writing Well” written by Jean Wyrick. This book guides us to write a variety of essays by following the steps from the basic elements to the advanced skills which provides us an elementary direction to the world of writing. In the following, we would make a brief introduction of this book
When composing works, we need to pay attention to several problems. Firstly, discover our audience is important. We have to change our style of writing and the form of composing our works so as to meet different readers request. Remember to organize our writings with clear thesis statements; we should not bore them with confusion, and disorder. Thus, to interest the readers with a sexy topic is really important. Also, choose to describe things in objective or subjective way. Different writing categories such as argumentations and descriptions have different writing methods. Secondly, try to convince the readers with abundant evidences to support our ideas. Besides, we can make our essays vivid by using sensory details. Thirdly, after finishing writing the articles, we have to revise them. Think of the questions such as whether the topics are too broad or too narrow, does specific ideas support our viewpoint and so on. Grammar, punctuation, word choice and usage are also what we should pay attention to. In addition, we could also ask someone else to look over our works, because with their help, we could find out more faults that we have not realized. Last but not the least, we have to write down the citation in a proper format.
All of these writing skills are contained in the book and really offers us a clear and complete guideline to writing well. Besides the brief introduction of this book, the following are some of the favorite chapters we think of as the most important and impress us the most.
To begin with, we discussed about which chapter is our favorite one. Most of us thought that Chapter 18 “Writing about Film” is the most impressive and interesting chapter. Sophia’s group introduced about how to analyze a film, and the clips they chose made their report become more abundant. We also connected this chapter with Jerome’s film class and Stewart’s movie discussion class. Then, we turned to regard some important writing skills when we are going to organize an essay. Recognizing your purpose and choosing the topic carefully should be consider in the first place. Knowing who the readers are, trying to interest and convince them with your unique viewpoints and feelings are significant. In addition, providing specific examples to support your ideas, building the arguments and giving out your position are necessary, too. In chapter 10, using appropriate tone and seeing the opposite points of view could help us to fight against those people who have opposite opinions.
Afterwards, the problems we should avoid became our discussing topic. In chapter 20 and 21, the usage of grammar and punctuation are pointed out. The order of time and space and the transitional words between each paragraph are also needed to be considered. Besides, we learned how to put the source and the author’s name in a correct form in chapter 14. The citation made the reference we used clearly. When we are going to write an article, remember to use the concise words and keep asking “why”. It can help us to express our meanings more concrete. At last, by the process of revising, our defects of writing can be improved. It is the only way to make our articles become better and smoothly.
When composing works, we need to pay attention to several problems. Firstly, discover our audience is important. We have to change our style of writing and the form of composing our works so as to meet different readers request. Remember to organize our writings with clear thesis statements; we should not bore them with confusion, and disorder. Thus, to interest the readers with a sexy topic is really important. Also, choose to describe things in objective or subjective way. Different writing categories such as argumentations and descriptions have different writing methods. Secondly, try to convince the readers with abundant evidences to support our ideas. Besides, we can make our essays vivid by using sensory details. Thirdly, after finishing writing the articles, we have to revise them. Think of the questions such as whether the topics are too broad or too narrow, does specific ideas support our viewpoint and so on. Grammar, punctuation, word choice and usage are also what we should pay attention to. In addition, we could also ask someone else to look over our works, because with their help, we could find out more faults that we have not realized. Last but not the least, we have to write down the citation in a proper format.
All of these writing skills are contained in the book and really offers us a clear and complete guideline to writing well. Besides the brief introduction of this book, the following are some of the favorite chapters we think of as the most important and impress us the most.
To begin with, we discussed about which chapter is our favorite one. Most of us thought that Chapter 18 “Writing about Film” is the most impressive and interesting chapter. Sophia’s group introduced about how to analyze a film, and the clips they chose made their report become more abundant. We also connected this chapter with Jerome’s film class and Stewart’s movie discussion class. Then, we turned to regard some important writing skills when we are going to organize an essay. Recognizing your purpose and choosing the topic carefully should be consider in the first place. Knowing who the readers are, trying to interest and convince them with your unique viewpoints and feelings are significant. In addition, providing specific examples to support your ideas, building the arguments and giving out your position are necessary, too. In chapter 10, using appropriate tone and seeing the opposite points of view could help us to fight against those people who have opposite opinions.
Afterwards, the problems we should avoid became our discussing topic. In chapter 20 and 21, the usage of grammar and punctuation are pointed out. The order of time and space and the transitional words between each paragraph are also needed to be considered. Besides, we learned how to put the source and the author’s name in a correct form in chapter 14. The citation made the reference we used clearly. When we are going to write an article, remember to use the concise words and keep asking “why”. It can help us to express our meanings more concrete. At last, by the process of revising, our defects of writing can be improved. It is the only way to make our articles become better and smoothly.
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